GUMNUTS

 

Little poems to 8 lines in length, any style, any theme.

First prize  $100AU
Second prize $50AU
and publication here.

This competition closes at the end of February annually

 

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February 2008

Judge's Comments: Ruth Strachan

 
Judging the Gumnuts entries was again a pleasure  I found many poems were pleasantly rich in simile.  Three in particular stood out for me, but others also were of high quality.
 
Arrow, which gained first place, is a poem which allows the reader into the feelings of the main character.  Something happens in the course of the poem - it progresses.    When read aloud the sounds in 'shattered' and 'splintered' are very evocative.  It is a poem to stir the emotions.
 
Bats is packed with delightful imagery.  The atmosphere of light fantasy is enhanced by the light sounds of P and S. I found it thoroughly entertaining.
 
Passing Swans gives the reader a great deal in just the three lines plus title.  In fact the title of each successful entry played an important part.
 
Congratulations to the winners.
 
Ruth Strachan

 

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Results

First Place:-     Arrow     by Patricia Clark, Victoria.

         Arrow

I saw a droplet
clear as a crystal bead
tremble in your eye
when I told you I was leaving.

It dropped like an arrow,
shattered my heart
like splintered glass -
how could I leave you now?

~

Second Place:-   Bats   by Marianne Musgrove - South Australia

           Bats

Little black vests
pegged to the powerlines,
they hang like witches' laundry
against the sooty sky.

~

Very Highly Commended- 

 Passing Swans     by Max Merkenschlagerl, South Australia

Passing Swans

Three drifting notes
on a liquid sheet
score music for my soul.

~

Highly commended poems:-

Winter's Night   by Mark Williams,  Victoria

 

Winter's Night 

Eternal star splendour waits
above the ocean’s swell,
patient waters,
bathing dark rocks.

You are the winter night.
In your breath is unrest and
ultimate death.

~

Flores     by Miles Trench, South  Australia

                     Flores

I am but petals, fallen from this
red red rose, small.  Dust, dust and
petals, blown in the wind:  tomorrow
and alone, pierced through the shroud
and I remember . . . . . .

Without you, I am but petals.  Small
red petals of dust, blown about by the wind;
like all things that linger.

~

Paparazzi     by Patricia Clark, Victoria

Paparazzi

There are spelikins among us
who, for a quick buck
would veil the colour
that stands out in the fog.

Bright images trashed
in media of contempt;
one by one our heroes tumble
in the plain light of day.

~

Just Like Kids   by Max Merckenschlager,  S.A

 

Just Like Kids

With infuriating insolence,
next-door's leggy grapevine
scaled her fence,
shinned her drainpipe,
and stared rudely down on her
garden of gray pavers.

~

Commended Poems:-

 

What We Can Learn From Black Sheep  by Marianne Musgrove - S. A.

 

What We Can Learn From Black Sheep

White sheep
know fences are there to protect them,
colour inside the lines
and only try out for the chorus.

Black sheep
know fences are there to be jumped,
have no time for Bo Peep
and always, always star in their own show.

~

 

Autumn Shades  by Jan Foster,  N.S.W.

 

Autumn Shades

Leaves turning,  crisp cool mornings,
parklands draped with red and gold.
Foliage mantilla morphs to a carpet,
Koel is silent, the honeyeater gone
Autumn is gently drawing its curtain,
declaring an ending to summer once more.

~

Release  by Mark Williams,  Victoria

Release

From confinement  to
incredible freedom
and delight.

This  -  this is life. 

So new to this world,
too young to know a threat.

How quickly
death is calling you. 

~

 

 Unaware    by Glenn Bray,  Vic

Unaware

Leafless 

 trees weep

 unaware of
coming
 spring.

~

February 2007

Judge's Comments: Ruth Strachan

What a wonderful response to the inaugural Scribbli Gum competition! All entries held interest, and many had a natural rhythm and an echoing of sound, so it was painful to lay some aside.  However, some entrants seemed to have tried to fit a longer poem into eight lines, which did not really work well.  These pieces could be quite successful in a competition for longer poems. It was good too to see some seemingly simple little poems that were not simplistic, but well crafted.

 Everything considered, the winner is Blue, in which the atmosphere and the silence are so well presented.  It is a poem that calls the reader back to it - congratulations!  Second place goes to an unusual and lovely offering, Moonshine,  and Very Highly Commendeds go to Rosella  and The Last Thing I Saw, two very effective poems.

All entries were of a very high standard - thank you for the pleasure of reading them.

Ruth Strachan

Copyright for all work remains with the author


 

Results

  First Place:-      Blue     by Pat Rosier, New Zealand.           

Blue

 

Paint me in dull flat colours today
Grey, like the pre-rain sky.

 

Use a wide brush, and work
with long, torpid strokes.

 

Have the light fall outside
the frame, casting long shadows.

 

Hang me in a dark corner, and go,
quietly, leaving the door ajar.

~

                            

 Second Place:-   Moon Shine    by Em Hofstede - New Zealand

Moon Shine

 

Tonight I kissed the surface of the moon-
in the palm of my hand I held it.
Tonight, the craters were made
by my fingertips
and old footsteps
were whispered
away
with my
breath.

 

~

Very Highly Commended:-

 The Last Thing I Saw     by Edel Wignell, Victoria, Australia

The Last Thing I Saw

 

The blue-ringed octopus
Rests in my palm:
A golf ball of poison...
So beautiful.

~

 

  Rosella   by Glennis Henning, NSW, Australia

Rosella

 

Swiftly it flashes, a palette of colour,
Softly alights on callistemon bough,
Carelessly sips of the bountiful nectar,
Beautiful rainbow beside a red flower.
Silently watching, a furry grey hunter,
Stealthily creeps to the blossoming bough,
Stretches its paw with a deadly intention
.. . .
Still, ruffled rainbow beneath a red flower.

~

 

Highly commended poems:-

 Art Deco     by Helen Lowe,  NZ

Art Deco

 

Acute angles of roofline
thrown against shadowed sky,
neon signs overlap
bare branches, rusted iron -
angle on arc on cube,
a ziggurat of cityscape
seen through mirror glass,
through a pane, lightly.

~

Crows    by  Edel Wignell, Victoria, Australia 

Crows

 

Crows strut, in glossy black,
Proprietorial;
Retirement village undertakers:
Superior, satisfied -
Future carrion assured.

~

  Comfort    by Dorothy Swoope, NSW Australia

Comfort

 

Tossing and turning
thoughts stream in the chill of night,
until your warm dream filled breath
soothes and penetrates my sleepless back,
entering my heart,
reminding me of the start,
that blew so hot,
burning still, a slow soulful flame.

~

  Crows & Haiku    by Fred Curtis    Victoria, Australia.

Crows & Haiku

 

crows caw in the wind
to interrupt my flawed dreams:

from the battle ground
a crow watches -- in one-eyed
anticipation
crows eye a gibbet
with its noose of hempen rope:
one down, two to go

~

 quinta essentia      by  Julie Waugh    NSW  Australia

quinta essentia

 

mostly marching across the surface with
singular moments of being of it, in it
meagre encounters with magnanimity
when the soul stretches leisurely over skin
and consciously subsides
irredeemable by desire
never forgotten as markers of evolution

~

 

Commended poems:-

The Naked Heart     by Kate Landsberry   NSW  

The Naked Heart

 

bare and unadorned

truth finds its place
within the heart
where secrets are not judged
and light abides


entwined with dark

~

Timeless                   by Kate Landsberry   NSW

                  Timeless

 

Too soon, the childish laughter
and the simple tears have gone

 

Too soon, have I packed away in boxes
butcher paper drawings - yellowed and crisp

 

Too soon, has the tiny package I once held
become a woman - articulate, capable and loving

 

She is all that I hoped
and yet, sometimes, it seems too soon

~

Home    by Jan Foster  NSW                        

Home

Home
once more,
open door,
arms flung wide, smiles,
welcoming prodigal son back
with joy.

 

~

 The Big OE      by Sue Howard       New Zealand

The Big OE

 

 I cried when they left, I couldn't help it.
The tears just leaked out of my eyes and down my face,
just like the love I have for my son that seeps out of my voice
when I speak of him with pride and love.

 

They had to go of course, it was inevitable.
Although occasionally when I see a family
relating with unmeasured and with careless love
I feel sadness too deep to contemplate.

~

 

 Little Icarus    by Fred Curtis   Victoria Australia                                   

Little Icarus 

 

Icarus ignored his dad
Wondering why things turned out bad,
Dad had said, 'Fly down not up.'
But Icarus was a know-all pup.
So up above the sky so blue
Little Ic. he flew and flew,
Until his waxen wings they melted
And into the down-below he belted.

 

~

                         

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